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la_marquise ([personal profile] la_marquise) wrote2012-01-10 11:13 pm

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1397 words today. Go me. And not too many of them about socks, either. Aude is shocked and scared, Jehan is trying to be practical, Liyan is curious, and Qiaqia... well, is Qiaqia.

'Aude leant on him more and more as they made their way there, first through the wide streets of the Silver City – keeping to the sides, where servants and the poor were expected to walk, so that they did not inconvenience their betters – then down the long stair to the Brass City, whose guards looked more at their garments than their faces, dismissing them for torn hems and worn sleeves, and finally all the way through the dirty, stinking streets of the Brass City itself, jostled by mill-workers on their way to the night shifts, by hawkers and prostitutes, beggars and street-children and all the myriad different forms that poverty took.'

(Yes, that is all one sentence. Yes, I know. But it wanted to be that way.)

Skirt of the day: brown linen.

[identity profile] aliettedb.livejournal.com 2012-01-10 11:21 pm (UTC)(link)
It's a nice long sentence, full of juicy details. I don't see why it should be arbitrarily cut up....
:-)
And yay progress!

[identity profile] queenoftheskies.livejournal.com 2012-01-10 11:30 pm (UTC)(link)
That is a wonderful sentence.

Congrats on your awesome word count.

[identity profile] lanerobins.livejournal.com 2012-01-11 12:25 am (UTC)(link)
I do love your posted snippets! I can't wait to meet these characters.

[identity profile] http://users.livejournal.com/la_marquise_de_/ 2012-01-11 02:15 pm (UTC)(link)
They make their debut (in the book before this one) in August this year.

[identity profile] lanerobins.livejournal.com 2012-01-12 06:32 am (UTC)(link)
Great! I look forward to it!
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[personal profile] lagilman 2012-01-11 12:42 am (UTC)(link)
I am a fan of the well-turned sentence, no matter how long. :-)

[identity profile] kythiaranos.livejournal.com 2012-01-11 12:46 am (UTC)(link)
I have no problems with long sentences. That one was a nice way to encompass the journey.

[identity profile] aberwyn.livejournal.com 2012-01-11 01:50 am (UTC)(link)
Yes, I like it, too.

[identity profile] a-d-medievalist.livejournal.com 2012-01-11 04:17 am (UTC)(link)
as long as it's punctuated properly :-)

[identity profile] http://users.livejournal.com/la_marquise_de_/ 2012-01-11 02:16 pm (UTC)(link)
I hope so. US punctuation is different to UK, so I will have to check.

[identity profile] a-d-medievalist.livejournal.com 2012-01-11 03:16 pm (UTC)(link)
yep. The editor of the Brepols volume didn't send me the stylesheet, so he ended up making huge numbers of changes, largely because he simply hadn't mentioned I should change my spelling to UK and use UK punctuation rules.

[identity profile] http://users.livejournal.com/la_marquise_de_/ 2012-01-11 04:25 pm (UTC)(link)
I have the Chicago Manual of Style next to the Cambridge Copy-Editing Manual on the shelf over my desk.

Metrics

[identity profile] helen-lerewth.livejournal.com 2012-01-11 12:36 pm (UTC)(link)
That's a great sentence! It needed to be long. I agree with Kythiaranos: the sentence describes the journey.

Re: Metrics

[identity profile] http://users.livejournal.com/la_marquise_de_/ 2012-01-11 02:16 pm (UTC)(link)
It wouldn't break up into smaller units. And thank you.

[identity profile] desperance.livejournal.com 2012-01-11 12:55 pm (UTC)(link)
My life these days is all about socks. Yesterday morning there was a trail of four, leading like footprints from the hallway to the living-room. The living tracks of the Sock Monster, I am assured...

(Also, I once wrote a sentence that was 400 words long. It got broken up by the damned copy-editor, but even so.)

[identity profile] http://users.livejournal.com/la_marquise_de_/ 2012-01-11 02:14 pm (UTC)(link)
It's a serious thing, infestation by the sock monster.
400 words? I might manage that in academic prose, but... *Is awed*